A large portion of this chapter is
wasted spent giving us the exact text of the contract and so many boring/stupid e-mails between Ana and ChristianGrey. You think I’m joking, but I’m not. There’s only about 6 pages of actual text in this 22 page chapter. Yes, you read that right, less than a third of the chapter is actual story. *shakes head*
- Unnecessary and boring, but I get why she included it.
- However, if you are going to have excerpts from a contract appear multiple times in the book, please god, have them match up. There are direct contradictions in this contract with the one that she read a few chapters ago.
ChristianGrey bought her a MacBook Pro. Shocker. Having a guy come into her apartment and set it up for her seems a bit overkill though.
Her bewilderment over having and e-mail address it a bit much. I’m really tired of Ana’s “I’m so innocent and naive I don’t even know how to do things that a girl like me would need to know to survive” act.
Okay, the detail of the e-mail exchanges is just…unnecessary. If you take away the headers of the e-mails, this is what the second transaction reads:
ChristianGrey: I hope you had a good day at work
Ana: Sir…I had a very good day at work. Thank you
ChristianGrey: Delighted you had a good day. While you are e-mailing, you are not researching.
Ana: Stop e-mailing me, and I can start my assignment. I’d like another A.
ChristianGrey: Stop e-mailing me- and do your assignment. I’d like to award another A. The first one was so well deserved. :)
It continues much like that. Are they 12? Also, that conversation took up two pages of the book. TWO PAGES WERE DEDICATED TO THAT EXCHANGE.
At the end of the chapter Ana finally does a little bit of research about being a submissive. She researches what she is thinking about getting herself into and decides that it repulses her and makes her sick. Logically, this should be the end of the story right? She doesn’t like it. It’s not for her. She tells him no. End of story.
Tell me why I’m only halfway through the first of three novels.